Posted by Kay Salady
Innocence heard sin
Softly whisper in her ear
“Surely you won’t die”
As red’s forbidden color
Infused us with agony
Lucas Cranach the Elder-Adam and Eve
For the Purple Treehouse on Tanka 5-7-5-7-7
Posted on August 22, 2011, in poetry and tagged agony, forbidden, Gooseberry Garden Poetry Picnic Week 1: Adam and Eve, innocence, red, sin, tanka. Bookmark the permalink. 20 Comments.
Beautiful… if loving is a sin…count me in!
a display or outburst of intense mental or emotional excitement [agony]
an overpowering emotion or exaltation; a state of sudden, intense feeling [ecstasy]
Words are so very powerful. It’s amazing in how many ways we can interpret them.
Count me in!
Excellent poem. I loved the last lines too.
Wonderful poem. Nice use of the prompt.
Here is my offering for this first Gooseberry Garden picnic: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/this-eden/
Temptation indeed. Very good.
gentle and lovely …
simple, nice, tight work, I totally like!!! 🙂
My offering: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/19/fragment-of-yesteryear/
beautiful poem with a bite.. i like it.
here is my tanka share:
cool poem ….red is definitely not my colour, but love can always tempt me …..thank you x
very amazing work…
thanks for sharing.
this is really well done, so many layers. It’s like an Impressionist painting in words!
Beautiful, well-written, Kay.
yea- very succinct and to the point kay.. glad to be of acquaintance back thru gooseberry!
Take a chance: human’s flaw or greatest advantage?
smart entry, thanks for sharing.
join week 3 tonight, theme: the kiss.
bless your Sunday.
lovely lines! color red can be very interesting 😉
Haiku has three lines,
for a formal one,
each line contains 5, 7, then 5 syllabus,
for example, “Haiku” this word has two syllabus, Hai-ku, you read it, shall know it,
write a Haiku piece,
the above line has 5 syllabus, 1-1-2-1, count it, it could be the first line of a Haiku.
your submissions are not Haiku,
appreciated your support.
write some authentic Haiku and share then.
Error on behalf of webmaster. So sorry! I know very well what haiku is and how to count syllables.
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