The Darkness
The darkness came to suffocate my soul
Bending my will with foreboding hands
Stripping me of all my convictions
Wide-eyed speculation frozen in obscurity
Intermittent tremor for a gulp of air
From a gullet that is torn wide open
The darkness hovers o’er this poured out shell
Chipped on edge of delinquent dreams
Floating in the vapors of abandon
©Kay Salady
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Posted on November 1, 2011, in poetry and tagged abandon, delinquent, foreboding, obscurity, suffocate, tremor. Bookmark the permalink. 24 Comments.
Kay Salady's Poetry 
Dear Kay,
No darkness will ever be able to suffocate you, for you are brave and bubbling with confidence of self esteem. Love you dear.
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Powerful imagery. But, the darkness can be conquered too. 😉
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Very dark write. Darkness can be alluring and consuming. Good write, Kay.
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The last three lines really struck me as worth reading several times. Wonderful images that pull you in, despite the darkness, you just want to see the shell and watch the terrible things happen. It seemed even more poignant against the background of wedding bouquet and pearls – oh dear, I dread to think what sadness fueled this poem, but I’m very glad I got the opportunity to read it. Lovely stuff.
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“The darkness hovers o’er this poured out shell / Chipped on edge of delinquent dreams ” — striking lines with an appealing ambiguity to the “chipped on edge” part.
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nice….i really love that last stanza…really great imagery and feeling in that….some deep emotion here…
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Very powerful and full of imagery. Well done!
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you shine like a star,
amazing expression.
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This is a wonderfully written dark poem about a lost soul. I can feel the fear, the depression and the hurt, Very nicely done my friend!
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the vapors of abandon…some strong words to underline the darkness..throwing shades..sometimes all we need is a candle…think i’m going to light one now…
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Darkness has so many colors…Nice work here.
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The sad darkness in your poem is described so wonderfully, it makes the reader shiver…
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This is real dark and so powerful, I really enoyed this piece.
No amount of darkness could overcome the shining star that you are
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Brilliantly written
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Thank goodness I didn’t go out “trick or treatin'” this year. 🙂
This is written very well.
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darkness consuming one’s soul ….very dark and sad …beautifully written thank you x
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So much darkness. I can feel it completely overwhelm the character. Well put.
Cheers!
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Deep emotional impact. Intense!!
William
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You pull in vivid imagery with this poem. It’s a powerful piece.
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It is vivid, terrifying and I desperately want to find out that it has been vanquished! Which shows the power of your words – to call up that depth of emotion. Brilliantly written and more than a little scary.
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Very Nice Poetry on a Nice Theme ..
Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!
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Cheers !!
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Wow, so dark – disturbing almost. But I loved it, I could feel the air in my chest getting tighter as I read it. Wonderful work!
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“Intermittent tremor for a gulp of air” – great line!
Great write!
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i am in awe of your words and emotions combo. hugggs 🙂
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