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Innocence heard sin

Softly whisper in her ear

“Surely you won’t die”

As red’s forbidden color

Infused us with agony

©Kay Salady

Lucas Cranach the Elder-Adam and Eve

For the Purple Treehouse on Tanka 5-7-5-7-7

About Kay Salady

I write about the greatest force on earth that, I believe, lives on forever and surpasses all else. "All your poems read like I am watching an artist use words instead of colours full of feeling." ~Anon.

Posted on August 22, 2011, in poetry and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 20 Comments.

  1. Daydreamertoo | August 22, 2011 at 7:56 am

    Beautiful… if loving is a sin…count me in!

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    • Kay Salady | August 22, 2011 at 8:56 am

      a display or outburst of intense mental or emotional excitement [agony]
      an overpowering emotion or exaltation; a state of sudden, intense feeling [ecstasy]
      Words are so very powerful. It’s amazing in how many ways we can interpret them.
      Count me in!

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  2. Strummed words | August 22, 2011 at 8:18 am

    Excellent poem. I loved the last lines too.

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  3. charlesmashburn | August 22, 2011 at 9:24 am

    Wonderful poem. Nice use of the prompt.

    Here is my offering for this first Gooseberry Garden picnic: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/this-eden/

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  4. tigerbrite | August 22, 2011 at 9:27 am

    Temptation indeed. Very good.

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  6. West Lake | August 22, 2011 at 12:39 pm

    amazing…

    well put.

    🙂

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  8. Heaven | August 23, 2011 at 4:25 am

    beautiful poem with a bite.. i like it.

    here is my tanka share:
    http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2011/08/tanka-enthralled.html

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  9. kez | August 23, 2011 at 6:07 am

    cool poem ….red is definitely not my colour, but love can always tempt me …..thank you x

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  10. Morning | August 23, 2011 at 9:40 am

    very amazing work…

    thanks for sharing.

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  11. caridwen | August 23, 2011 at 10:28 am

    this is really well done, so many layers. It’s like an Impressionist painting in words!

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  12. liv2write2day | August 24, 2011 at 4:23 pm

    Beautiful, well-written, Kay.

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  13. fiveloaf | August 25, 2011 at 9:13 am

    yea- very succinct and to the point kay.. glad to be of acquaintance back thru gooseberry!

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  14. Mike Patrick | August 25, 2011 at 12:40 pm

    Take a chance: human’s flaw or greatest advantage?

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  15. The Gooseberry Garden | August 28, 2011 at 7:38 am

    smart entry, thanks for sharing.

    join week 3 tonight, theme: the kiss.

    bless your Sunday.

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  16. bendedspoon | August 29, 2011 at 10:42 am

    lovely lines! color red can be very interesting 😉

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  18. The Purple | December 23, 2011 at 7:01 am

    hi,

    Haiku has three lines,

    for a formal one,

    5
    7
    5,

    each line contains 5, 7, then 5 syllabus,

    for example, “Haiku” this word has two syllabus, Hai-ku, you read it, shall know it,

    write a Haiku piece,

    the above line has 5 syllabus, 1-1-2-1, count it, it could be the first line of a Haiku.

    your submissions are not Haiku,

    appreciated your support.

    write some authentic Haiku and share then.

    best.

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